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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have acess to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nobody would dispute the fact that schooling is the prime factor in the development of a society.
However
, some
people
 think that all individuals think that all individual has the right to get higher
education
 in
university
with
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free of cost.I strongly agree with
this
 opinion
Firstly
, well-educated
people
 are the backbone of a society .So the
government
 should introduce free
education
.
For example
,Indragandhi
University
 offers free courses for its students .
Hence
 a large number of students from different financial levels choose
this
 institution for their studies.So more
people
 from different social sectors get better academic status.Apart from that free
education
 generates more highly educated individuals who can get good jobs as well as better payment .It produces better living standards in all social sectors.
However
,free
University
education
 makes a financial burden to the
government
.To make it more clear , if
government
 produce fund for each student for their entire studies ,it is a huge amount so the
government
 cannot manage
this
 cost by their income.Even though the officials have problems with cost-free
education
 ,they can make new measures to find the fund for
University
education
.
For instance
 ,they can charge more tax from the employees that money can use for studies of
next
 batches or generation. In conclusion,I reaffirm my point that
government
 should provide free
education
 to all students and does
not
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 matter their financial background .If the authority concerned to make proper planning for
this
 ,
it
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should generate well-educated
people
 with good jobs in all social sectors.
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