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Some people say that public libraries should be free; otherwise they are just a waste of money, especially because modern technologies and the internet allow easy access to resources. Discuss and give your point of view.

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Libraries
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 play an important role to educate students and
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 them knowledge and the public in general.And some
people
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 argued that public
libraries
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 are useless if they demand
money
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 from
users
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.In my opinion,
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 believe that public
libraries
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 should not be free. To start with,the payments that are given by the
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 of public
libraries
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 are mostly spent anyway.In these places,governments will divide them
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 all
people
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 who work in these book departments
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 as workers, librarians, and cleaners.
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,the
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users
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 have to pay will be used to provide more books in demand and increase the diversity among the subjects.For that reason,paying to read will give
people
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 more important
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.
On the contrary
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,most library
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 are students so they don’t have enough
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 to pay off each time they go to the library.Due to
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people
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 think that public
libraries
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 should be free to help students get knowledge easily.
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 of wasting some
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 to read the book in public
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libraries
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people
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 can use
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money
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 to go out and buy their own book.
Moreover
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,advanced technologies
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 as the internet can be another choice because nowadays all the information can be found on the internet so
people
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 don’t have to go to the public
libraries
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 to read books. In conclusion, it can be seen that
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 technology allows easy access to resources and public
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 are
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 not popular but I believe that paying for public
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 will help us more.
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