All inventions and discoveries like the discovery of fire and electricity have impact on our lives so much so that people can no longer live without them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It does seem to
me
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be
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true that inventions and discoveries play a pivotal role in the
life
of human
beings
these days.
As a result
fire
and
electricity
has become
inevitable
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part of
people
's
life
. I too completely agree with
this
opinion and
this
essay elaborate the same.
To begin
with,
fire
is considered
as
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the
first
source of energy
which
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that
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human
beings
discovered. In detail, ancient
people
discovered
fire
and it is used in different forms and in different machines for several
purpose
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.
This
can be well illustrated by an example, all the food items
people
want, need to be cooked mostly on
fire
.
Besides
,
fire
is used in
cloder
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colder
closer
countries as a source of heat which in turn helps
people
to make themselves warm.
Hence
,
people
cannot even imagine a world without
fire
. Another reason in
favor
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of
electricity
is it made the
life
of
people
more comfortable.
This
would mean that
,
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almost all machines in
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the house
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house hold
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household
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and
compaines
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companies
work with power. So
people
these
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dyas
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days
even cannot think of a power failure. A study conducted by the Southern University of Canada reveals that ninety
percentage
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of
people
said that they even cannot imagine a single day without
electricity
. Apart from
that
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the whole world is connected with the help of
electricity
. In fact,
people
are not able to use mobile phones and other gadgets without power.
Therefor
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electricity
plays a vital role in the
life
of human
beings
. To conclude it
evident
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from the
above
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mentionsed
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mentioned
points that new inventions and discoveries have become an inevitable part
in
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of
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the
life
of human
beings
. In the near
future
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it is estimated that the dependency of human
beings
on machines and new inventions would likely
to
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continue.
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