Question: Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Music
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is a soul heart for many individuals. Certain
kind
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of people
believe
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that listening to
music
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brings old memories and culture together.
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essay will demonstrate that why I agreed with the above statement
Firstly
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, there are different kinds of
music
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rhythms in the world and people
listening
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to them
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. Some listen to
music
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as a stress-buster and they strongly believed that it reduces
there
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their
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stress for a short period of time.
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, Akon is the top musician in
usa
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USA
, who sang a song in Hindi which is a massive hit in India.
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,
music
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is not meant for any specific age
groups
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group
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.
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socially available for all the world
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all countries have
there
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their
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own
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national anthem songs
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conclusion
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music
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stimulates memories and reduces stress
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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