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The Internet has changed the way we interact with each other now compared to in the past. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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the way of
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people
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This
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 and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of
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internet
 in the present industry are
communication
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 and abundant
information
 for the
people
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Firstly
,the speed of
communication
 is faster which is obtained by the web.
This
 way family and friends can easily communicate through skype across the world and anywhere in the country.
Secondly
, almost can anyone find
information
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plenty of resources are available where we can easily get within minutes.
However
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also
 has some major disadvantages like
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 addiction disorder and
cyber crime
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activites
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activities
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 market.
People
 are more in
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e-commerce
eCommerce
apllications
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applications
 and social network almost 18 hours a day.
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 it leads to various effects like health problems and less
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 in their career perspective.
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 they are not
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achieving
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 goals in life.What's more,
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 can create more serious drawbacks
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situations
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 where criminals
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. the presence of hackers programs
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 increasing in our
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PC's
pics
 and phones.
For instance
 users personal
information
 like name ,bank details and phone
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 are often accessed by culprits which used on
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,leading to significant economic loss.
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cyber crime
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efficient
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 in the backend to chase these culprits. To conclude,
although
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 has certain
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disadvantages
 like addiction disorder and
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 of criminal rate,it has an extremely
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positive
 impact on
communication
 with other
people
 anywhere in the world and provides
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plenty of
information
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