You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
Nowadays television is playing a vital role in our today's world.The Public is making their concentration towards
entertainment
rather than interacting with family.it
leads to the population becoming dumb and Capitalize word
It
Moreover
, ensuring safety measures with the crowd. I strongly agree apply
that people Verb problem
apply
get
affected by television. Verb problem
are
This
essay will give the strong points why I agree with this
and provide a logical conclusion. First of all, entertainment
plays a major role in everyone's life while
few are not interested because of their mind psychology. I strongly believe that movies and web series can make the crowd to apply be happy and it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
makes
Correct subject-verb agreement
make
us
Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
day Correct article usage
the
very
shorter when we are Rephrase
apply
in
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
bore
. Replace the word
bored
For instance
, in recent two years
most of the population Add a comma
years,
are
Wrong verb form
has been
work
from Wrong verb form
working
homes
and few people have lost their jobs Fix the agreement mistake
home
and
in that Correct word choice
apply
times
if they want to enhance their hours decrease Fix the agreement mistake
time
entertainment
become the biggest part in
everyone's life. Change preposition
of
Secondly
,the community has also
become lazy due to
over addictive
Replace the word
addiction
of
television. Change preposition
to
This
way people are extending their hours apply
late at night and not maintaining a proper lifestyle. Verb problem
apply
For instance
, apply am facing this
issue apply
these days,because of work from home because of Verb problem
apply
this
I have undergone various health issues and
but it is public to be protected Correct word choice
apply
with
others. Change preposition
from
To conclude
,I strongly believe that its
public Change the word
the
to be occupied
their time with Wrong verb form
should occupy
entertainment
rather thaN
interaction with society.Correct your spelling
than
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion