the three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The given charts provided information concerning the alterations in
yearly
costs of a special school in Britain over the course of three years; 1981, 1991, and 2001.
Correct article usage
the yearly
Overall
, throughout the given period, the most and the least significant sources of expenditure were related to the teachers' salaries and insurance, respectively.
It can be clearly seen that,
more or less Remove the comma
apply
a
half part of the school budget had been allocated to teachers' salaries over the period recorded. Correct article usage
apply
In contrast
, insurance
part occupied altogether just 13% of the financial budget in three years; constituting 2% in 1981, 3% in 1991, and 8% in 2001.
The cost Correct article usage
the insurance
for
resources Change preposition
of
such
as books that
comprised 15% of the spending in the first year faced an upward trend and reached 20% in 1991. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, in the next
ten years
the expenses of Add a comma
,years
this
sector declined to just under one in ten. In contrast
, the budget of
furniture and equipment at first Change preposition
for
was
reduced to one-Unnecessary verb
apply
third
of its previous one (from 15% in 1981 to 5% in 1991) and then
rose dramatically to 23% in 2001. Regarding the costs of other workers' salaries, it encountered a fall from 28% in 1981 to just 15% of the expenses in 2001.Submitted by TUTOO on
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