Instructions Read the question below and write a letter. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. You are going on a short training course at a college in New Zealand. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require

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Dear Sir,

This

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is Jeevitha, enrolled in a short term course called Marketing Management at Conestoga College, New Zealand. I am writing to inquire about the accommodation options that

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could find to stay in New Zealand. I would like to inform you that

this

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is my

first

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time visiting an international country and I have no idea about finding a suitable place to stay. I am looking for a private room somewhere in a safe location for the time period from the 5th of January to the 30th of May.

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, I would like to stay closer to avail the facilities

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as laundry and convenience stores.

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, I prefer houses near to entertainment facilities

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as beaches, clubs and restaurants and my budget is between $400-$500 per month. I would be grateful if you could find some appropriate place that suits my requirements. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, JS

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

156 words

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