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Today family members eat fewer meals together. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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In recent years, having a family dinner is not common due to several external reasons. Personally, I think it is not a positive
trend
. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on some causes behind
such
 a phenomenon and prove why I opt for the negative side.
To begin
 with, there are various reasons why family
meals
 are now uncommon.
First
 and foremost, with the rise of competitiveness of society, many people have no
time
 to cook and have family dinner.
For instance
, some workers have to work overtime to finish their workload. In a busy world, having a family meal is no longer a priority for adults,
in contrast
, other stuff will be considered most,
such
 as work and study.
Therefore
, we tend to ignore family reunions.
Moreover
, the variety and convenience of fast food have certainly reduced family mealtimes. According to the statistics, with 19% of
meals
 in the USA being eaten in cars, we have already depended on fast food rather than eating at home with family members.
Hence
, because of fast-paced lifestyles, we are not prior to choosing to have
meals
 with family.
Although
 with the rapid development of society, we have no choice or no
time
 to have dinner with family, I still believe that it is not an advantageous
trend
.
Firstly
, eating together builds closer relationships within the family. Spending
time
 together over
meals
 will definitely keep in touch with each family member on a regular basis, despite they have a different life.
Secondly
, family dinners are quite beneficial for physical
health
, brain, and spirit or mental
health
, owing to the fact that there are lower fat, sugar and salt in home-cooked
meals
.
Therefore
, those people who spare
time
 on family
meals
 tend to have a lower rate of obesity.
Hence
, having fewer family dinners is not a perfect choice for relationships and
health
, and it is a negative
trend
 continuously. In conclusion, family
meals
 are not ubiquitous nowadays due to the development of a competitive society and the rise of the fast-food industry.
However
, I still advocate that
this
trend
 is harmful, and we should have dinners with family in order to strengthen family bonds and benefit our
health
.
Submitted by Esther on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • bonding
  • interaction
  • quality time
  • technology-free
  • busy schedules
  • work commitments
  • nurturing relationships
  • sharing experiences
  • community spirit
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