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Fast food now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular,some feel that this is a positive trend,While others do not.What are your opinions on this?

#food #countries #feel #trend
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It is undoubtedly true that fast food has become a major issue for current
health
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 nowadays,due to the laziness of the
people
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.Yet,there remains some disagreement that the overall effect has been positive or negative.
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Nevertheless
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 I personally believe that junk foods are
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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product
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products
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 in contemporary society.
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 and foremost,Buying
pre prepared
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 meals from restaurants is a great
oppertunity
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opportunity
 for working
people
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 because it is not
time consuming
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 and as well
as
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is
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 no need to travel to get vegetables every weekend.Life just
get
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more
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easier.At the same
time
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people
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 do not know they are creating a path for
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 which alter their lives to make a reservation for hospital beds.
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,it is a possible fact that you can get
diagnose
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 with
obeysity
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obesity
 by having
consuming
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to consume
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this
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preapacked
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prepacked
pre-packed
prepackaged
 food
everyday
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.For an
instance
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 there are 30% of
people
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 right now suffering from
obeysity
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obesity
 or
stressed
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a stressed
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 lifestyle due to
emerging
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the emerging
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of
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apply
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health
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 problems.It has been a habit among the
people
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 until now.Yet,They just continue with the current situation even though their life gets doomed. I would like to point out that consuming junk
meal
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meals
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th
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that
 can lead
for
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to
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 serious
health
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 issues like obesity,cancer as well as diabetes.It is our choice to make a difference
on
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in
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 our
health
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. To conclude,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 tend to buy fast food, because it is the easiest method.Anyhow handful of them
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are
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aware
the
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 impact of these meal types
towards
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 our lifestyle.we should
first
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 love ourselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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