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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

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Technological advancement changes every aspect of our life, including education methods. One of the common methods to teach
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 in the past was lectures, but nowadays, with new
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, lectures are no longer the only method to teach
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. New
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 changes the format of learning and provides more flexibility of time and place for the
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 to attend classes.
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,
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 as Zoom and Google Meet, provides instant conference
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 the internet. That means
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 can join the class at their home or in the coffee shop or any place they like.
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 between school and their home.
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 a new format of teaching. Pre-recorded classes are recorded and uploaded to the internet.
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 could attend the class at their own pace and with
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 own schedule. They just need to download the video whenever they are available.
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, these technologies
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 have their disadvantages. Since
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 do not need to go to school for their lectures, the interactions between classmates will be diminished. As we may know that education should not just only provide knowledge and training to
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 be all-rounded.
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 obtain social
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, communication
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interactions with others. Lack of interpersonal
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 training is one of the drawbacks that new technologies will have. In conclusion,
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 the advantage of new technologies given is more convenient for
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 to learn, its disadvantage is lack of social
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 training.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • interactive
  • personalized learning
  • collaboration
  • cost-effectiveness
  • engagement
  • digital resources
  • virtual classrooms
  • educational technology
  • learning styles
  • information overload
  • distraction
  • screen fatigue
  • inequality in access
  • teacher-student relationship
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