SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT NOW WE CAN SEE FILMS ON OUR PHONES OR TABLIETS, THERE IS NO NEED TO GO TO THE CINEMA. OTHERS SAY THAT TO BE FULLY ENJOYED, FILMS NEED TO BE SEEN IN A CINEMA. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

Many people prefer to watch movies or tv shows on their mobile phones or other electronic devices, but
on the other hand
, some people choose to watch
it
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multiple
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.
Firstly
, watching movies on phones is a nice idea for people who can do multitask without wasting their time sitting in one place,
for instance
, my friend, watches her show or videotape while doing exercise, doing laundry, or doing any other household works and she enjoys it and
also
doesn't waste her time sitting in one place. But there are
also
some drawbacks of watch shows or motion
picture
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on phones, like, binge-watch the shows and never taking their faces off screens, or while doing the dishes your mobile phone slipped in
water
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, etc.
Secondly
,
crowd
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the crowd
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who love to watch films in the theatre, can have full fun of the movie, like speakers all over the place, eating popcorns, drinking cold drinks, no one there to tell them to lower the volume, can cheer, and many more. To conclude, I prefer watching
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picture
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in the cinema because you can have total fun.
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