You are planning a 2-day work training outside your city next month. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel regarding the accommodation arrangements for your visit. In your letter, you should: • introduce yourself and your company • ask the availability of their rooms • tell him / her your every arrangement and needs.

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letter finds you well. I am writing
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letter to you to look for a short stay
accomodation
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in your hotel. My name is June, I am from Mildura, I work in a company called Brightlight, which is a wine grapes company and I will attend a 2 days work
trainning
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training

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courses in Melbourne. I will be arriving in Melbourne on 20th Jan 2022 and I will be checking out from your hotel on 22th Jan 2022. Could you please let me know what rooms are available on the dates
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perfer
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to have a double deluxe room rather than just a single room.
Also
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, I would like to have
spa
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a spa

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in my bathroom and a 70 inches flat screen tv. I think I need a
pick up
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pickup
pick-up

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and drop off service as well because
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is my
first
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time
to come
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to Melbourne. Could you please let me know as soon as possible, so that, I can organise my flight tickets
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Please call my mobile 0402043289, as I would like to discuss
others matter
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other matters

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with you too. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours
Sicerely
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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