Providing a national system in country where the unemployed receive a regular payment only encourage people not to seek work and puts an unreasonable strain on country’s financial resources. Discuss this statement and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
It is true that
money
has an inevitable role in the life of human beings. Some counties financially support their unemployed citizens by providing them with regular payments which in turn Use synonyms
an
extra burden for the Add a missing verb
is an
government
itself. I will discuss Use synonyms
this
view in Linking Words
this
essay before arriving at an opinion of mine.
On the one Linking Words
hand
it is argued by many that, it is really a blessing for the unemployed when authorities provide some monthly or weekly payment for them. Add a comma
,hand
This
would mean thatLinking Words
,
Remove the comma
apply
people
who have no job Use synonyms
also
need to pay rent for their residence, water bill, electricity bill, need to buy groceries and so on. Linking Words
People
who have no income may depend on Use synonyms
money
lenders and Use synonyms
at
their debt would Change preposition
apply
rose
up. Wrong verb form
rise
Then
, Linking Words
Linking Words
finally
jobless Add a comma
,finally
people
become homeless and at the extreme end, as daily lots of Use synonyms
new
are reported on Correct your spelling
news
people
committing suicide due to debt through media. So, if they get Use synonyms
money
from Use synonyms
Use synonyms
government
, they can Add an article
the government
also
lead a quality life. Linking Words
Hence
it is the responsibility of the Linking Words
government
to give a hand to jobless individuals by giving them Use synonyms
a
regular payment till they become independent.
On the downside, if authorities help Correct article usage
apply
unemployed
by providing Correct article usage
the unemployed
money
it would make them dependent. To Use synonyms
specific
, there is Add a missing verb
be specific
chance
that Add an article
a chance
the chance
people
become too lazy and individual never search for a job as they have enough Use synonyms
money
getting on a regular basis. Use synonyms
Thus
, it would be Linking Words
extra
burden for Add an article
an extra
country
as a whole which would Correct article usage
the country
otherwise
, can use that Linking Words
money
for the overall development of the country. Use synonyms
Moreover
, for some Linking Words
people
get too high Use synonyms
money
through national payment system than the salary they will get if they go for work. Use synonyms
Linking Words
Such
a case there is Change preposition
In such
chance
for Add an article
a chance
the chance
people
Use synonyms
exploiting
the Change the verb form
to exploit
government
system. Use synonyms
For instance
, in Australia, authorities provide unemployed different benefits rather than regular national payments as jobless get Linking Words
reduction
in electricity Correct article usage
a reduction
bill
and in Fix the agreement mistake
bills
health
sector Add an article
the health
also
. Linking Words
Thus
, individuals think it is better to stay without Linking Words
job
. As a consequence, a good number of Add an article
a job
people
think providing financial assistance to Use synonyms
jobless
make them lethargic and dependent.
In conclusion after Correct article usage
the jobless
analysis
both Replace the word
analysing
the
Correct article usage
apply
perspective
I am of the opinion that Add a comma
,perspective
positives
outweigh the negative side as Correct article usage
the positives
jobless
Correct article usage
the jobless
also
have the right to live in society. I think in future Linking Words
also
Linking Words
this
trend would likely to continue.Linking Words
Submitted by divyaesa2012 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.