You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you are doing well. I have been a regular subscriber of your travel magazine - Leisure Weekly, and have enjoyed the articles on varied topics
such
as travel tips, food and accommodation hacks. In your latest edition, I noticed a mistake in your article regarding Hyderabad city, specifically in the section describing the monument Charminar. The article stated that Charminar was constructed in order to commemorate the loss of lives due to the flu epidemic, but the fact is that it was dedicated to the people who lost their lives to yellow fever. I would urge you to please re-check the information in your articles since each mistake would propagate incorrect information to your large base of subscribers.
Furthermore
, the veracity and integrity of the magazine would be questioned if
such
mistakes were to be repeated. As a fan and well-wisher, I recommend publishing the correction and a brief apology to the readers in your upcoming edition. And as a long-term plan, I recommend the usage of
software
Add an article
the software

The noun phrase software seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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that runs a cross-verification algorithm across the web and highlights the information that needs to be reviewed.
This
would efficiently decrease the number of errors. Thank you for your time and have a great day! Regards, Sri Konganti
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