Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think the changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been very negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion

Modern-day
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life
lifes
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are totally dissimilar to
past-life
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. A host of
people
suppose that the shifts have many merits, whereas others expect that they have various demerits. In
this
essay, I will look at
this
topic from both sides. On the one hand, modern lifestyles have upgraded
people
's lives.
People
live a modern-day life, they can apply highly developed technology as well.
For example
, we are using smartphones, computers with the Internet every day, and in fact, they are so useful that we only have to wait in
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seconds to look for anything, any information we need.
Also
, current lifestyles result in human's wisdom and knowledge. When
people
live a modern lifestyle, they can learn what is evolved and what is backward,
then
fogy and evil customs will be removed.
On the other hand
,
modern-lifestyles
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accidentally make a wrong way to think and to live in some parts of
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. Many youngsters nowadays overuse their money, and when their budget
run
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out, they borrow others. They borrow so much but do not work to make money, so one day they do not have
ability
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to pay back, they will go to
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prison.
This
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is very heated in Korea, Korean youngsters borrow money to go travelling,
check in
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luxury places, but do not have any thinking about work and long-lasting benefits.
Besides
,
modern-lifestyles
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is sometimes harmful because some
people
do not only apply technology for its advantages but
also
abuse technology. They spend much time on the Internet, a lot of
people
are suffering health problems due to
this
, and some
people
use the Internet for criminal purposes. Overall, the merits of
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are to improve human's beings and remove backward customs, but the demerits
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also
seriously that various
people
are now having deviant thoughts and some are suffering from health issues.
Therefore
, the two views are still half-baked.
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