In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In many parts of the world,
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a rental
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house
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wasn’t assessed as important as a home. And as my viewpoint,
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belief may be the right one due to many reasons will be mentioned below.
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, I assume that rental
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is a worthy way to release the increasing population in the world, by
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minimize
the poaching to accommodate individuals,
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create more choice of place for the family to live . But rather than the merits,
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tendency
will bring back more gamble for the renter. Every now and
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, it might be hard to coexist with the neiboughrbood. Sort of things likes a big
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or
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up many big dogs can impact on the
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next door's
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, we wouldn’t have
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pace for loud music, playing instruments,…
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, being nurtured in an uncertain place as
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a rental
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also
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affects the offspring to grow naturally. It is
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important for a home to protect us against the spread of
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the pandemic
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, we would not know whether a rental
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can protect us since
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type of
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usually stems from a flat in which loads of people live.
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, we can create long-distance contact with one another. Financially, we don’t have to pay household
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annually
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, enabling us to live
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a better-off
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.
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building
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a house
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house
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houses
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may lead to poaching, people can plant green pace on their own as much as they can. Ultimately, I appreciate the way people choose to live in a flat or a rental
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but for
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I would prefer to plunge
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myself
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in
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my own
house
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than a rental one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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