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Different types of environmental pollution seem to be affecting an increasing number of people in the world. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what solutions would you suggest?

#pollution #people #world
Global
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 population has been incredibly
increase
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 compared to the past decades. Due to
the
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human
activities
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,activities
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 various
kind
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kinds
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 of environmental
pollution
 is taken place of huge impact
to
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on
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 the world. In
this
 essay, I will discuss reasons and solutions to have
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an eco
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eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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environment
.
To begin
 with, Due to the high-tech, transportation system and industrial related companies developed and cause to
emission
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the emission
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 on
environment
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the environment
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.
For instance
, most
of
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people
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the people
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 prefer to own vehicles to travel more conveniently
instead
 of using public transport system which caused more air
pollution
 and sound
pollution
.
In addition
 to that
industrial related
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 companies emission their
wasetage
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wastage
 directly
to
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into
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 the water without doing
necessary
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the necessary
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 treatment. Even government state regulation in
this
,
company
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the company
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 do not
involved
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 to do proper treatment because of the amount of money they need to spend is quite high. So most
of
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rare
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the rare
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 creatures has been affected as well as
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percentage
presentage
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the presentage
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 of the drinking water has been reduced compared to the past decade.
Henc
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Hence
, it is clear that due to
human made
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 activity,
environment
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the environment
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 has been affected. In order to overcome those factors government should get precautions
such
 as
introduce
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 new regulations and act. Reputed authorities should take action to improve
public
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the public
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 transport system.
Also
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 they need to encourage by funding researchers those who trying to find alternative power which is eco friendly.In
additional
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 to that
authority
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authorities
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 strictly punished the companies
those
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who
not
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 willing to do proper waste management. To conclude, even global population have involved with
the
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environmental
pollution
, they should
forcus
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focus
 given solutions to have
eco-friendly
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an eco-friendly
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environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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