In many contries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this? How can it be solved?

In the 21st century, human
life
became more complex and materialistic in nature.
Furthermore
, these enormous changes exert
health
issues and
diseases
in our society .In
this
essay, I will explain the various causes and solutions for these problems.
To begin
, nowadays
people
are busy with their
life
whereby it always promotes unhealthy eating habits like fast food intake and eating large portions of meals in a limited time.
In addition
,these changes are correlated with chronic
diseases
such
as cancer,kidney failure and heart attack.
Moreover
, stressful
life
and unhealthy competition influence our day to day
life
.
For example
,According to the Indian Institute of Medical Science, 70% of IT professionals in India
facing
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various
health
and mental problems because of their sleepless and busy
schedule
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.Resultantly, more professional work means less physical exercise
although
, it
generate
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overweight and posture problems.Another key
things
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to remember migration of
people
from rural areas to urban areas creates eminent changes because
people
far
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away from agrarian
life
and familiarise
with
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themselves with
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industrial
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sector. Originally,
this
is the key reason for the beginning of humans dangerous habits and it promotes community
health
diseases
There are
many
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mitigating
procedure
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for the reduction of
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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lifestyle
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.
Firstly
, extensive use of homemade vegetarian fresh food
reduce
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bad cholesterol and obesity because it stimulates healthy fluids in our body.
Secondly
, balanced
life
promotes physical and mental fitness
although
, it
enhance
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people
sleep routine and develop stress relief .
Thirdly
, exercise like cardio, yoga and meditation facilitate positive results in our
life
. To support
this
, recently many
people
all over the world
celebrate
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yoga day because
people
understand the importance of physical exercise and its relevance in
modern
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a modern
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busy
life
. Reportedly, yoga practice
deprive
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65% of lifestyle
diseases
like
diabetic
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diabetes
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,cholesterol and blood pressure. In conclusion, there is a saying '
health
is
wealth
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a wealth
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of everyone' without
this
treasure no-one can exist.
Therefore
,everybody should preserve their body and mind for keeping prosperous
life
.
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