People believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draw the attention to problem, while other think celebrities make the problem less important. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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majority of individual think prominent mankind keep up towards worldwide assistance organisations draw the awareness to
problems
, apart from
this
other believe
celebrities
make the dilemma less vital. I endure that statement to an extent I have some solid ground to defend my opinion which would like to explicate at length in the paragraph to come. to commencing with,
celebrities
are vital role in every human life because, whenever a great difficulties come
then
people
's hope on a great personality who can solve these
problems
.
celebrities
help another country but ,
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they see on benefits. reason being they want to fame and name.
for example
, whenever there are any IPL match or any big occasions in the international countries
then
, celebrity go there and
support
them. he does
this
because he wants the
people
there to know his name.
moreover
, due to ,corona many
people
were unemployed and many
people
died
then
celebrities
had been donated there.
furthermore
, many
people
believe that superstars do not
support
problems
. the reason that there are some
problems
which prominent are not supported. for ,example there was a farmer protest in India for 1 year but no Bollywood
celebrities
support
them. Owing to that, they did not feel any benefit of their own. They
support
fake rules made by the government for farmers but their rules were not right so that was the reason kisaan never give up. in conclusion, I would like to believe that famous personalities
support
just to make own name of fame.
Although
many
people
like and
support
the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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