People believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draw the attention to problem, while other think celebrities make the problem less important. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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majority of individual think prominent mankind keep up towards worldwide assistance organisations draw the awareness to
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make the dilemma less vital. I endure that statement to an extent I have some solid ground to defend my opinion which would like to explicate at length in the paragraph to come. to commencing with,
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are vital role in every human life because, whenever a great difficulties come
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's hope on a great personality who can solve these
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help another country but ,
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they see on benefits. reason being they want to fame and name.
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, whenever there are any IPL match or any big occasions in the international countries
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, celebrity go there and
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because he wants the
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there to know his name.
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, due to ,corona many
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were unemployed and many
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died
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had been donated there.
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believe that superstars do not
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. the reason that there are some
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which prominent are not supported. for ,example there was a farmer protest in India for 1 year but no Bollywood
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them. Owing to that, they did not feel any benefit of their own. They
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fake rules made by the government for farmers but their rules were not right so that was the reason kisaan never give up. in conclusion, I would like to believe that famous personalities
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just to make own name of fame.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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