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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of three different categories of nutrients that could be harmful if people consume excessively in fundamental meals. The three types include
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, saturated fat and added sugar. The data is taken from the United States of America. Overall, there is an apparent separately distribution between the nutrient types in every meal. In terms of meals, there is one evident common point that the highest percentages of the type of nutrient which are consumed in
dinner
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 are
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 and saturated fat while regards to added sugar, it is slightly over two-fifth and
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 the highest one. According to
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, people consume most of which
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dinner
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 and it is
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 the highest figure (43%) whilst breakfast and snacks include an equal proportion of
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 consumed with each of them reaches 14%, along with the rest percentage is 29% in lunch. In regard to the
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, 37% of saturated fat is consumed. Lunch contributes to 26% of consumption and the rest of them are 21% and 16% in snacks and breakfast, respectively. With regards to the remaining nutrient type, added sugar, snacks contain 42% which is
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 the highest figure, followed by almost a quarter (23%) of percentages and roughly one-fifth (19%) in
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 and lunch. The lowest one is only 16% in breakfast.
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