In many places, new homes are needed l, but the place available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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Space crunch is an issue of concern. In many demographic locations construction of a new house is not possible; the only possibility is to construct
at
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sub-urban
areas
. A group of schools opines that villages are to be protected. I refute
this
belief as
development
is a measure to be analysed based on overall progress, and those who are facing space-crunch must be allowed to construct
new
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building
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in villages. The
first
cogent argument is, if it is
matter
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of
protection
then
the
first
question arises
protection
from whom and for whom?
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is to be done for
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mankind; their
protection
must be the
top most
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priority. Those who are not finding
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an area
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area
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to build
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a home
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home
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in urban
areas
,
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must be privileged to build one
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at
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less
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developed area.
Moreover
, a place can only be protected and developed when
people
start living there. In
this
case
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it is worth mentioning, even a few places in India were disrupted as
people
left those places and moved to a new location. In continuation to the above, for overall balanced progress, construction of all types of residential and commercial buildings are to be permitted at all the
areas
. As because
,
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urban
areas
are already thickly populated
therefore
housing
development
must be in
such
localities where
people
can enjoy the gift of nature.
Furthermore
,
people
with comorbidity are in need of fresh air and pure weather and climatic condition. To extend the life span of
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they may start living in society far away from
city
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the city
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.
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,
people
frequently
falling
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ill sent to Deoghar, a less developed area, for
speedy
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recovery. To conclude, though a few
people
are in favour of protecting the backward places;
however
, I am opposing
this
idea. Preservation and
protection
are the applicable
concept
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after
sustainable
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the sustainable
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development
of
human
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the human
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being
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  • brownfield sites
  • urban regeneration
  • green building technologies
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