In many places, new homes are needed l, but the place available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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recovery. To conclude, though a few

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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rapid urbanization
housing demand
overcrowded cities
affordable housing
environmental degradation
biodiversity
natural habitats
ecological balance
sustainability
carbon sequestration
climate change
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urban regeneration
green building technologies
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In many places, new homes are needed l, but the place available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

More and more people are moving away from agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequence of this? What solutions can you offer?

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In most successful organizations, some people believe that communications between managers and workers is important, other people said that other factors are more important. What is your opinion?

In many countries, the government likes to spend more money on the arts. Some people agree with this. However, others think government should spend more on health and education. Discuss both sides and giver your opinion.

Some people believe that women should be treated as equal to men when applying for a job with the police or the military. Others think women are less suitable for this kind of job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.