Everyone should stay in school until the age of eighteen, considering the significance of primary and secondary level education in a learner’s life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Considering the importance of different levels of education in an individuals’ life, a group of thoughts assert that children should remain in the educational institute till adulthood, even I ponder the same. The
first
and the foremost reason is, rudimentary skills are essential for survival in
this
world which
one
can only acquire from schools. Since children do not mature enough to differentiate between the right and wrong things, so they entail proper guidance from someone to move ahead in
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direction and build their career.
Although
one
can gain knowledge from his parents
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, teachers influence more comparatively. Not only
children
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get fundamental skills but moral and ethical values are
also
be inculcated to them during their schooling.
Besides
this
, schooling is mandatory for getting
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reputation
repetitive
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job in an organization as
majority
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the majority
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of companies have set the standard criteria to apply for any vacancies
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their
premise
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. To exemplify, if
one
wants to do the job in
multinational
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company, having a matric certificate is
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for indulging in the recruitment process.
Thus
, education plays a vital role in
everyones’
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life.
On the other hand
, an array of
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claim
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that schooling before
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into the adolescence stage creates
unnecessary
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burden
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on the parents. As nowadays, school fees are exorbitant and everyone can not afford the expenses of schooling which
consequently
leads to several problems for parents. Apart from
this
, some students do not interested in studies and they want to build their
career
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in
different
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a different
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field
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which
do
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not require academic qualifications.
For instance
, an athlete
have
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the necessity to do the practice of his field at
early
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stage of his life to get expertise in that field. It is not a pragmatic approach to study the things which are irrelevant to his future preference. Conclusively,
although
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of people believe that eighteen should not be the lower limit for schooling, whilst as per my view, to become a successful person and to achieve the dreams
one
should complete his primary and secondary education before turning into
adult
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an adult
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.
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