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The charts below show agricultural production in two different regions of the country.

The charts below show agricultural production in two different regions of the country.
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Eastern
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The eastern
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 part of
country
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the country
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produce
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produces
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 meet at
the
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a
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 large amount as compared to other items and West part of the reason has the highest
production
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in
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of
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grains
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.
While
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 the
production
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 of meat is almost the same for both regions.
To begin
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 with , meat is the most popular product in the western area with
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the
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management of 35% followed by
diary
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dairy
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second
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 highest
production
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 35% . On the other side vegetables and
grains
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 are less produced agricultural items. Reap of
grains
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 is 15%
while
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 vegetable has
production
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almost
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 5% above than
grains
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.
However
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, the western part of the country produces 20% of vegetables which is almost 15 times more than the Eastern region
while
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 the
production
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 of meat is almost the same for both regions. Wasting of grain has the highest percentage of
production
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 with regards 45% remaining item which is
diary
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dairy
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 produce by 15% of total
production
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 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, grains with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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