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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It may seem that we have various ways to improve the brain
such
 as imagination, linguistics,
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 and so on.
However
, some people think that knowledge from reading is better than watching
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television
. In
this
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this
 statement and I will give a sampler from my experience. Owning the fact that technology
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the main role
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these days
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television
 is one of the choices which the majority of people select to learn.
Firstly
, watching from the channel can
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 easier than text because of the motion picture or sound.
For example
, we can use
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samples of voice and
image
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 from broadcast series to improve
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skill
performantly
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.
In contrast
, studying from a book
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 boring and quitting
this
 activity in a short time. To illustrate, when they look
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 the book which has entire of the
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word
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, it is hard for intending
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development
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skill
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. On the one hand, the modern method is suitable for thinking fantasy and learning new language
skill
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due to
 the time. It is true that learners who
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 knowledge from a screen can accomplish faster than reading from papers.
According to
 the digital lesson, it provides distinct content which focuses only on usable data.
For instance
, the broadcast lessons that intermission via
television
 present with detail and do not show the intro so much.
Furthermore
, someone who is weak in reading
skill
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 must waste
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time more than other people.
Therefore
,
television
 is helpful for
this
 group because they can listen and look at the picture
instead
. In conclusion,
it is clear that
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thought processes, citizens have a more obvious advantage over the book and can improve language skills and imagination.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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