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Studies have suggested that nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons and what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things?

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In recent years, younger generations have preferred spending
time
 on television programs rather than engaging in games that need a physical activity that enhances their creativity. One of the reasons for
this
 phenomenon is that
children
 have the freedom to spend
time
 as they desire.
Also
, the
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 for outdoor activities
are
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is
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 scarce.
However
, both
parents
 and governments can cooperate to tackle
this
 problem. Some
parents
 assume if they set boundaries for the amount of
time
 their
children
 can stay against the screen, their offspring would be unsatisfied.
For example
, in my country, Canada, many caregivers find it difficult to console their
kids
 if they do not allow them to watch TV. To tackle
this
 issue, the caregivers should become aware of the adversities caused by binge-watching on the
kids
' health.
Moreover
, they should learn how to handle
children
's tantrums and how to discipline them. If the
parents
 do not know how to behave properly with their
kids
, they will not be able to resist their requests.
Furthermore
, many urban areas do not have adequate playgrounds, making it difficult for many
children
 to spend
time
 in group games. It is estimated that in my hometown Toronto, the playing areas should be doubled to be sufficient for the preschool-age population.
As a result
, many of the
kids
 are forced to stay home and watch TV ,
although
 they prefer to play with
their
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 same age group. It is the
governments'
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government's
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 responsibility to construct enough infrastructure for the young generation. In conclusion, the lack of parental education and scarcity of playgrounds have caused
the
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children
 to spend more
time
against
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on
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 TV screens. Both the
parents
 and the government are responsible
to solve
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for solving
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 these problems.
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