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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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In the globalization era, having a
bility
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the ability
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to speak a foreign
language
 is a crucial skill for people to integrate into the world. For that reason, some educationalists suggest that
children
 should learn a new
language
 as soon as possible at primary school rather than secondary school.
This
 brings both pros and cons. In my opinion, the benefits are greater than d
rawbacks.
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ne
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hand, there are many positive impacts when a child approaches a foreign
language
 at e
arly
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an early
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age.
Firstly
, for
children
, learning a new
language
 comes to them more naturally by trying to mimic what they hear rather than by principles. The
children
 can pick up pronunciation and intonation more easily as they learn it subconsciously.
Secondly
, they talk with no s
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and no fear of making mistakes. From t
hat
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they build up the confidence which is essential in communication.
Moreover
, they will benefit from knowing a foreign
language
 in their upcoming studies and careers as well.
For example
, recently many universities in Vietnam have given a priority in entrance e
xam
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for students possessing IELTS certificates.
On the other hand
, teaching
children
 another
language
 at y
oung
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a young
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age
also
 has some negative impacts.
To begin
 with, it could affect their ability to learn their mother tongue
language
 properly because they might get confused by learning more than a
language
 at the same time. A good example f
or
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this
 is my n
eighbors,
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 they have a 5-year-old son, the boy has started to learn English s
ince
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he was 3 years old in parallel with Vietnamese,
consequently
 now he cannot speak Vietnamese fluently like his peers.
In addition
, learning f
oreign
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a foreign
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language
 might be b
urden
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a burden
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to
children
 because t
heir
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of their
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heavy schedule at school including many subjects like math, literature, science, …, which they should spend time on. To conclude, it seems to me that the advantages of teaching
children
 f
oreign
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a foreign
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language
 at e
arly
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an early
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age outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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