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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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In the globalization era, having a
bility
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the ability
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to speak a foreign
language
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 is a crucial skill for people to integrate into the world. For that reason, some educationalists suggest that
children
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 should learn a new
language
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 as soon as possible at primary school rather than secondary school.
This
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 brings both pros and cons. In my opinion, the benefits are greater than d
rawbacks.
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hand, there are many positive impacts when a child approaches a foreign
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 at e
arly
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an early
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age.
Firstly
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, for
children
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, learning a new
language
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 comes to them more naturally by trying to mimic what they hear rather than by principles. The
children
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 can pick up pronunciation and intonation more easily as they learn it subconsciously.
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, they talk with no s
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and no fear of making mistakes. From t
hat
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they build up the confidence which is essential in communication.
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, they will benefit from knowing a foreign
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 in their upcoming studies and careers as well.
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, recently many universities in Vietnam have given a priority in entrance e
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for students possessing IELTS certificates.
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, teaching
children
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 another
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 at y
oung
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a young
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age
also
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 has some negative impacts.
To begin
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 with, it could affect their ability to learn their mother tongue
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 properly because they might get confused by learning more than a
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 at the same time. A good example f
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this
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eighbors,
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neighbours
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 they have a 5-year-old son, the boy has started to learn English s
ince
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when
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he was 3 years old in parallel with Vietnamese,
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 now he cannot speak Vietnamese fluently like his peers.
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, learning f
oreign
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a foreign
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language
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 might be b
urden
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a burden
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to
children
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 because t
heir
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of their
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heavy schedule at school including many subjects like math, literature, science, …, which they should spend time on. To conclude, it seems to me that the advantages of teaching
children
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 f
oreign
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a foreign
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language
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 at e
arly
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an early
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age outweigh the disadvantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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