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Many students have trouble being able to focus on school studies, with their attention span increasingly deteriorating. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays,distraction is common among
students
.Most of them have struggled to focus in class or when preparing their lessons.One of the important reasons is media platforms which make them busy.
secondly
, they are worried about their future.Prohibition of some applications on the
internet
 and educating
students
 to help them to reduce diversion when they study. Recently,with enhancing networking and
internet
 people especially youngsters spend long hours in front of the computer or on the mobile phone.Lots of them play video games that involve them even when they are in school.Some children prefer to talk with their friends through mobile applications
instead
 of studying.Finding new virtual friends is one thing that may lead to wasting time on the
internet
.
Additionally
,youth individuals think about the financial situation more than before because of competition for finding a job ,which can interfere with their concentration ,
for instance
,finding a job in Iran is crucial for pupils who graduated because living expenses are going up and job opportunities are diminishing. In the modern world, we need to control screen time.Experts suggested specific times for every period of life.The schools' authorities should set up some fines for
students
 who use cell phones while being in class.The other solution which can help is to educate
students
 to improve their concentration .Establish some programs in the curriculum of
students
 which decrease their anxiety after media withdrawal improve their attention when doing their homework.Some mindfulness activities like yoga deline the stress related to the removal of these types of distractions. In conclusion,various things can distract younger people , which parents and ministry of schools should be aware of them in order to prevent as much as they can.The government should pay attention to banning some detrimental
internet
 products
such
 as computer games that have addicted children.
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