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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure . Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 era, every person wants to
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 abroad society because there are a lot of facilities. It is considered that some individuals
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 to
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community
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 for pleasure while other masses believe that
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 trip has a negative impact on the land travelled to. I large disagree with
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 paragraphs. To commence with ,there are numerous positive points of travelling abroad
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people
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 can easily learn about other
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 as when they
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countries
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 they came to know about other
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 and they learn new things when they
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 other
countries
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 . Nowadays many
people
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visit
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other
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 for their studies because in foreign
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 education level is so high and every person can easily learn abroad study .
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 ,there are a lot of jobs opportunities in other
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 for their jobs and business.
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, a
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 more income from
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 because
people
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 pay more money for
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 to
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country
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 of
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 as a notion get more income from
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 . There are a plethora of jobs in
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 . So ,
travel
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 to foreign
countries
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 has a positive effect on the
countries
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 because when
people
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visit
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other
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country
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then
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 they come to know about new things .
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, many
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travel
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country
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 for their business. Some individuals
visit
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 with their families as
a
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tourism.
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,
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 to abroad
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 has a positive impact on the
countries
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. To conclude , there are various merits of
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 to
to
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foreign
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People
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 came to
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 about the other culture and traditions.
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 of. Income because a
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get
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 more money from air
travel
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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