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It is better for the students to live away from the home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #home #university #studies #parents
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While some people think that
students
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 ought to live alone whilst studying at
university
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, it is believed by others that it is better for them to remain living at home. In my opinion, I think
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 benefit from living alone unless their finances prevent it.
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, one of the main reasons why it is advantageous for
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 to live alone is that they become totally independent of their parents and able to think for themselves.
University
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 is a time for
students
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 to spread their wings and try new ideas or ways of thinking and learn to cope with making
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life changing
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 decisions. By living alone, without the influence of their parents, they develop rounder, decisive characters able to function well in the world. Another advantage to
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 fleeing the parental nest is that they learn to manage money. Most
students
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 see
university
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 as a stepping stone to adulthood and so by learning to live on a budget, they develop the skills needed once they are earning a salary and balancing their finances. Renting property
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 comes with responsibilities to both landlords and housemates, and
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 is a
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 lesson to learn in useful
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 skills.
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,
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, regardless of how beneficial living alone might be for
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students
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, it might be financially impractical for some. For a small proportion of
university
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students
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, their finances might require them to stay at home for as long as possible until they are
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 able to support themselves through paid work. In conclusion, while it might not be feasible for all
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, living away from parents helps
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students
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 develop strength of character and useful
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 skills needed for when they enter working
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • diverse social environments
  • broader network
  • professional contacts
  • accommodation
  • financial burden
  • emotional support
  • psychological support
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • academic pressures
  • familial support system
  • distraction
  • focused study environment
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