City living in the 21st century is stressful and offers no advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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people

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say that

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living in cities have more pressure and have very little chance for quality time.

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, I do not concur with

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statement due to several

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with, big cities in the world bring up

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to free public amenities.

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living in the capital city have

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high mobility in doing their

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so they need

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transportation system to move from one place to another place.

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, there is a beneficiary facility

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is provided by the government for

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massive rapid transportation (MRT).

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, in some locations, let's take an example in Jakarta,

people

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do not have to

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of getting

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since the Ministry built free parks or gardens for them. The visitors can visit anytime and whenever they want to relax.

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, metropolitan areas have more

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opportunities for

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specifically

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generation, ranging from 25 to 35 years old. The requirements

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but most of them are not as difficult as in the town.

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with

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, nowadays, youth prefer to find a

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with some fringe benefits rather than working in a remote area. Even though the living cost is quite high, the availability of professions

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as being a staff in an office or being a teacher in an international school

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high demand. To sum up, living in a city is worth it and a good choice. It has some advantages for all nations

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as free public facilities and

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opportunities.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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convenient access
amenities
cultural diversity
personal growth
fast-paced lifestyle
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cost of living
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social problems
traffic congestion
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