Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To extent you agree or disagree?

Government
should not spend money on arts,music and theatre though they should invest more in public
service
. In my opinion,I strongly agree with
this
idea for many reasons. The discussion will be presented in the
next
following paragraphs.
To begin
,public
service
should
recieve
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funding
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than any other
places
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by
government
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.The enhancement
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service
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that people commonly use
such
as transportation and healthcare
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can improve the community conditions due to the fact that they can access
to
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portable
equipments
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machine
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.
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,the improvement
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public
service
make
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people's life convenient because the quality
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are provided.
This
is why the investment should be funded on public
service
by
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the government
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.
Additionally
,the money from
government
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which is funded
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public
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the public
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organization
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organizations
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can improve
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education as well. Since the technology devices are able to provide for many students because of funding, they can
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resources as well as
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accessibility to sophisticated
of
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information.
Therefore
, the investment should be given the most on daily
service
for example
school and public transportation in order to develop the country. In conclusion, it is vital for
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especially
government
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to
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provide
fuding
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funding
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transportation,health
center
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centre
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or even
school
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schools
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because it can enhance many factors
such
as
accesibility
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accessibility
on
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portable
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a portable
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object
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objects
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or even improve
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society-educational life.
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  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
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