Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To extent you agree or disagree?
Government
should not spend money on arts,music and theatre though they should invest more in public service
. In my opinion,I strongly agree with this
idea for many reasons. The discussion will be presented in the next
following paragraphs.
To begin
,public service
should recieve
Correct your spelling
receive
funding
than any other Correct quantifier usage
more funding
places
by Fix the agreement mistake
place
government
.The enhancement Correct article usage
the government
on
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of
service
that people commonly use Fix the agreement mistake
services
such
as transportation and healthcare center
can improve the community conditions due to the fact that they can access Change the spelling
centre
to
portable Change preposition
apply
equipments
example as Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
x-ray
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an x-ray
machine
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machines
Also
,the improvement on
public Change preposition
in
service
make
people's life convenient because the quality Change the verb form
makes
objects
are provided. Change preposition
of objects
This
is why the investment should be funded on public service
by government
.
Add an article
the government
Additionally
,the money from government
which is funded Add an article
the government
on
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by
public
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the public
a public
organization
can improve Fix the agreement mistake
organizations
the
education as well. Since the technology devices are able to provide for many students because of funding, they can Correct article usage
apply
recieve
versatile Correct your spelling
receive
of
resources as well as Change preposition
apply
the
accessibility to sophisticated Correct article usage
apply
of
information. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, the investment should be given the most on daily service
for example
school and public transportation in order to develop the country.
In conclusion, it is vital for organization
especially Fix the agreement mistake
organizations
government
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the government
to
provide Remove the particle
apply
fuding
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funding
on
transportation,health Change preposition
for
center
or even Change the spelling
centre
school
because it can enhance many factors Fix the agreement mistake
schools
such
as accesibility
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accessibility
on
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to
portable
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a portable
object
or even improve Fix the agreement mistake
objects
the
society-educational life.Correct article usage
apply
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