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Because most information about culture and history can be found on the internet today, museums are not necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The internet has brought about some outstanding facilities which can be replaced by conventional activities we did before its advent, one of which is accessing complete information about
museums
. It is believed that the
museums
 could be closed because of
this
 comprehensive access. In my point of view,
although
 the information
museums
 can be found online, it is not necessary to totally close them. On the one hand, visiting
museums
 is not considered just as a cultural activity. Most people find it interesting when they visit them with their kin and kith and have a fun time. They see the elements there and discuss them with their beloved ones and other visitors.
For instance
, someone may notice a part of a museum that they know is their friend's favourite and lead them to that section.
On the other hand
, the space of a museum and the sense of watching elements from a close range can not be perceived by surfing them on the internet.
This
 is especially more emphasized with regard to historical
museums
.
For example
, photos on websites are usually taken from an angle that does not include all minutiae of every object.
This
 can stop people who want to see more details of that object, especially about students and researchers. All in all,
although
 numerous useful information about
museums
 is available on the internet, they can not replace the physical experience of visiting them. In
this
 sense, I recommend that officials use cyberspace as a complement to real visits to
museums
, not as a replacement.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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