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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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As a result
 of globalisation, people's demand for fossil fuels has become stronger than before. If
this
 trend cannot be reversed, the reserves of
such
 resources will run out in the near future. Some people argue that only continually increasing the
price
 can mitigate
such
 a
problem
. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 idea because
this
 method has been proved useless in accordance with the previous experience.
Instead
, by changing habits and promoting renewable
energy
 people can really solve
this
problem
. On the one hand, the consumption of fuel cannot be reduced by raising its
price
. Governments have tried to increase the
oil
price
 to restrain the overall consumption for several years but, be that as it may, until today there is still no sign that the demand will decrease, and even worse, it was the other way around. In light of
this
 fact, it is reasonable to assume that only by increasing the
oil
price
 never will the
problem
 be solved.
On the other hand
, there are two methods that can really solve the issue aforementioned. One is to encourage citizens to change their habits.
For example
. if every driver in a city takes public transport or uses electric cars as a substitute for petrol cars for commuting, the need for
oil
 can be greatly decreased. Another solution is to use renewable
energy
. With little electricity, sustainable
energy
such
 as solar power and wind power can produce a tremendous amount of power for usage, which is much more efficient than burning fossil fuels. In conclusion, it has been witnessed that increasing the
oil
 cost in order to decrease the need cannot save its reserve.
On the contrary
, changing individuals' habits for reducing the dependence on fossil fuels or increasing the usage rate of renewable
energy
 can solve the
problem
.
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