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Some people believe teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit the teenagers and the community as well. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Share personal examples if applicable.

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Other than that, I conducted a project regarding
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 on the public’s satisfaction about
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 and security of agricultural products in Suzhou, and
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, participated in the sampling and testing of Hairy Crabs Recirculating Aquaculture Systems. My investigation and laboratory as well as leadership and collaboration skills were advanced during the process.
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 that, in the satisfaction survey, I realized that even in the same group, people’s satisfaction about a product or a certain kind of product can be diversified, and
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 I deeply felt the difficulty of summarizing the views of a group due to the diversity. In
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 case, I started to ponder how to investigate people’s viewpoints by multiple indexes and
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 make a good integration to improve promotional strategies and produce optimal policies. Beyond that, managing the new media platform including push of tweets and maintenance of user operation in the Publicity Department of Sunshine Drama Association elevated my
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 in oral and written communication. Through
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 experience, I came to understand that effective promotion depends on a precise grasp of the audience’s needs, scientific management and productive decision making. All of these motivate my exploration
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 advanced tools of strategy and decision making.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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