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Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. Some people believe we should buy food from the local farmers to protect environment and support local businesses. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Your internationally recognised EDSML programme always fascinates me as it excels in training students the applied data science and machine learning skills in an environmental context. The flexibility of the courses provided allows me to keep my studies broad and acquire a range of mathematical techniques, through getting exposed to the high-quality taught courses of computational mathematics, big data analytics, machine learning, and applied computational/data science. Mastering
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 associated techniques, I will be more competent to devote myself to the research of environmental pollution prevention and control, boosting the development of
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 industry. I expect to be one of your promising
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, and firmly believe a diverse and supportive community of mathematicians from all over the world will offer unparalleled and consistent advantages for achieving
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academic excellence and
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career aspiration. With the knowledge and techniques acquired from
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 studies, I would exploit my advantages to
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 some of the key quantifiable challenges around us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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