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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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 Choose socialize online rather than face-to-face. Socialize online have some positive and negative development. Positive like saving money, Saving time, having controlled over the place. Negative like, not having access to the Internet And no physical contact. Now we are going to talk about all of them. Saving money: socialize online reduce costs of like, transportation(you dont need to go out) and.......
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 option,help pepole to saving their money. Saving time: with socialize online,
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 don't need to pay their time for going and coming. Having control over the place: even, those
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 who live in worst places, can use the best facilities by socialize online. Not having access to internet: in my opinion,
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 is the worst negative thing about socalize online. Because, some
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 who live in places which is dont have good network conection. So they cant use socialize online as good as other
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. Physical contact: acording to pysichologist, physical contact, has more affection on learning and has faster learning than online conection. If we want to say the result of my writing, socialize online has more positive point and
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 accept it. Nowdays, we couldnt live without socialize online, Althogh has some negative point.
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