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Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are more
open-space
rooms
 in comparison with separate
rooms
 at offices nowadays. In my opinion, there are more disadvantages than advantages. Though the positive side is that there might be better communication between
employees
, I believe that you have no privacy and that you can not concentrate in these
open-space
rooms
. The main disadvantage of the
open-space
rooms
 is that it is always noisy
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 because multiple
employees
work
 in one great room.
For example
, if workers need to make phone calls and they do it
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open-space
rooms
, they can disrupt other colleagues from their
work
 and
this
 can lead to low
work
 efficiency.
Furthermore
, in
such
rooms
, workers have no privacy.
For instance
, everyone who sits behind or
next
 to them
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 is able to see what they do on their computer.
Such
 big
rooms
 with others can let people feel
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pressure, as they think that everyone constantly
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 at them.
This
 can lead to stress.
Therefore
, some
employees
 will not function properly in their
work
.
On the other hand
, supporters of these
rooms
 where few
employees
work
 at the same time, think that it leads to an increase of better communication with their colleagues.
That is
 because
,
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 they see each other the whole time. So, if they have a question they can immediately ask
to
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their co-worker. In conclusion, I think the disadvantages of working
all together
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 in an
open-space
-room outweighs the advantage, as it can lead to: a decrease in
work
 efficiency, having no privacy during your job and an increase in the stress level. The only advantage of the
open-space
rooms
 is there might be better communication with the co-workers.
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