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In some countries celebrities complain about the way media publicise their private live. Some people say that they should accept it as part of their fame.Do you agree or disagree?

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In some
part
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 of the world,the personal
life
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lives
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 of famous people is
showed
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 in public by
media
 where some individuals believe that they ought to accept it as a part of
life
.I entirely disagree with
this
. To commence with,in the justification of my notion that disturbance in private
life
. There is no doubt that famous people get fame through
media
 as they are always in limelight because of their activities but sometimes
media
 present their personal
life
 in
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public which is inappropriate for them and creates
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 of problems
such
 as family conflict.
Thus
 , they
end-up
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 with stressful
life
.A survey reveals that those people who are more popular reported to
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be have
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 more mental problems because of
media
.
Furthermore
, news productions show fake news in order to get
attraction
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the attraction
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 of viewers that put
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 impression on masses.
As a result
,it
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affects
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effects
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affects
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 both
personal
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 and professional
life
 of celebrities.A survey has been conducted by experts that 60 out 100 new are
no
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 appropriate that are related to the lives of film stars,cricketers and politicians.
On the other hand
,it has been viewed by some individuals that remaining in limelight is part of their
life
 as
media
 is
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specific
spcific
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 source which enhances their
famouness
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famous
.
This
 view is pointless because
media
 vanish their
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 enjoy and they
leads
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 to
host
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 of physical and mental disorders. To conclude
it
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,
although
their
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 are some
luctratives
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lucrative
 of
media
however
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,personally , I believe that
drawbacks
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 of
this
 tendency cannot be overlooked.
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