Mordern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

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technology has made it easy for
people
to download
music
and
books
from the internet for free .I believe that
this
is constructive development . On the constructive side,
first
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and foremost benefit is that it increases the source of entertainment for
people
as they can
listen
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their favourite
music
anytime and anywhere without any cost.To explain it,
people
have
busy
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life
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and they have very
less
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little
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time and
music
remove their tiredness and relax their mind.
As a result
, they may
consentrate
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concentrate
more on work with
relaxed
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mind. A survey reveals that those
people
who are
music
lover
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reported to be
do
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their work with more enthusiasm than
other
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others
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.
Furthermore
,
books
are
source
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of information for readers as these enhance their knowledge.Free
books
on
internet
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the internet
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encourage
people
to read
Thus
,
this
boost
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their knowledge about different fields.Apart from
this
, reading Ebooks
also
improve their reading skill which is act as
boon
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for pupils who cannot read fast.A study has been conducted by experts that 60 out 100 students prefer to read
e-book
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in order to become fast readers. On the destructive side,
expensiveless
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expensiveness
expensive less
books
and
music
is
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inappropriate for
masses
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because
people
always
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neglected and disrespected for free things.
however
,
this
view is pointless because lots of
music
listeners enjoy
tha
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the
music
on youtube which is free and download application for
books
. To conclude
it
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,
although
there are some drawbacks of free internet facilities
however
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,Personally , I believe that the benefits of
this
cannot be overlooked.
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