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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Gender-based trends are inevitable but are natural depending on the individual. Many colleges and universities have sen that ladies choose
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, while boys opt for
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, due to insecurities at ,home many daughters were not allowed to play outdoor games.
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 has quite an impact on how they behave and what they like. Not being part of any physical games makes them take the time and make some art while staying at home. Since they never played any sport they lose interest in many, as they cannot understand the play.
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 could be prepared from one place and does not require much physical energy.
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 is one of the main reasons for choosing
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 in place of
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 generalized behaviour of either girls or boys should be eradicated. The interest of any human should not be limited by gender.
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, the trend is changing rapidly thanks to the internet. Previously the percentage of girls in
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 class was <10% in my university now it has changed to nearly 30%. Interaction with a vast variety of people will change the way we think. The more we interact, the more we learn. To conclude, many girls tend to choose
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 while boys like
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 have taken a different chape recently. It is necessary that we change the tendency so that we have a diversified society. To a larger extent, the choice of any study should be on the individual rather than gender.
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