In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to leave large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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last
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decade, the shopping patterns of
people
have changed drastically.
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public is becoming more and more inclined in buying the required products from supermarkets, rather than from local shops. As a consequence of
this
the backbone of the economy
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and the overall growth of the country is being ruined. The cynical impact of the same is much more imperative than its positive development; for both the buyer and the local shopkeepers. Globalization has introduced the concept of
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mall
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to all the corners of every country. To start with the
first
cogent argument is, if the
people
of the locality start buying all the commodities from malls
then
the local shopkeepers will face disruption of their business.
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of the small businessman will face the consequence of the same.
In addition
to
this
, the impact of the same will be reflected in society too. Not only
this
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in the long
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this
will
also
hamper the sustainable development of
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. In continuation to the above,
this
is
also
affecting the buyers of all the
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.
People
who are purchasing articles from malls
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are being provided
many
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extra facilities, but those are not free of cost.
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public is paying the same indirectly, as the cost of all those
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already incorporated in the rate of every item. To illustrate, facilities, like
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glitzy interior along with
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in a multi-storage shop, are being charged as an inbuilt cost of goods.
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,
people
purchasing
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more items than
the
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they
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required as all the eye-catchy items are always displayed to attract the target group.
Thus
people
are pushing their purchasing limit to a great extent;
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excessive expenditure. In conclusion, though malls are employing many
people
but
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the
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dark-side
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of
this
is
area
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of much concern.
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trend
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will result in destroying the occupation of grass level
people
. The condition of
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along with
overall
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economy will exacerbate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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