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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to leave large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In the
last
 decade, the shopping patterns of
people
 have changed drastically. The general public is becoming more and more inclined in buying the required products from supermarkets, rather than from local shops. As a consequence of
this
, the backbone of the economy and the overall growth of the country is being ruined. The cynical impact of the same is much more imperative than its positive development; for both the buyer and the local shopkeepers. Globalization has introduced the concept of a shopping mall to all the corners of every country. To start with the
first
 cogent argument is, if the
people
 of the locality start buying all the commodities from malls
then
 the local shopkeepers will face disruption of their business. The family of the small businessman will face the consequence of the same.
In addition
 to
this
, the impact of the same will be reflected in society too. Not only
this
, in the long run,
this
 will
also
 hamper the sustainable development of the country. In continuation to the above,
this
 is
also
 affecting the buyers of all the scales.
People
 who are purchasing articles from malls are being provided with many extra facilities, but those are not free of cost. The general public is paying the same indirectly, as the cost of all those is already incorporated in the rate of every item. To illustrate, facilities, like an air-conditioned glitzy interior along with an elevator in a multi-storage shop, are being charged as an inbuilt cost of goods.
Moreover
,
people
 purchase more items than the requirement as all the eye-catchy items are always displayed to attract the target group.
Thus
people
 are pushing their purchasing limit to a great extent; causing excessive expenditure. In conclusion, though malls are employing many
people
 the dark side of
this
 is an area of much concern.
Such
 a trend will result in destroying the occupation of grass-level
people
. The condition of the micro-economy along with the overall economy will exacerbate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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