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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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Day by day technology is developing very fast. These developments sustain improvements in all of our daily life. In the future, I completely agree that nobody will use printed books or newspaper, they will start to read everything online because
of
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online reading is practical and
sustain
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 environmental protection.
Today’s
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 world time is very important and people prefer practical things.
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 environmental protection is a major issue for everybody. Online reading is very practical due to some extent.
Firstly
, it is cheaper than
paper based
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 readings. Everyone can download all
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 of reading documents from
internet
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 without paying anything. Too many websites were established for downloading
free-readings
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On the other hand
, access to knowledge is easier in online readings. All you have to do is “google it”. You do not need to go to the bookshop or other places. Online reading
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 sustain environmental protection. Our world’s biggest issue is climate change nowadays. Preferring online reading will be beneficial to our environment because of
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trees
 will be cut. According to
scientist
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researches
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 five million
trees
 are
cutting
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 every year and if we continue to do
this
 we will lose thirty-six
percent
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 of our forests in three
year
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 our resources are limited. We should use our resources efficiently to protect our environment’s.
Trees
 have
huge
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 impact on animal and plant life. If we decrease cutting
trees
, we will protect our
bio diversity
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. To conclude, I totally agree that online reading will be developed and people will not prefer
paper based
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 readings in the future because of the reasons that I explained above. I do not think we will see books and newspapers
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 people’s
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