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more and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. do the benefits of studing abrouad outweigh the drawbacks?

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More and more
students
 are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks. Needless to say,
education
 plays a vital role in
individual's
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 life. It is often seen that a large number of
students
 went
to
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abroad for higher studies. There are many pros, which include good work
opportunity
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 and better
education
 as compared to cons, which consist of cultural shock and cost.
To begin
 with, studying
in
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abroad is an expensive affair.
Students
 have to spend millions of rupees not only in school; but
also
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things
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thinks
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 like accommodation, travelling, food, which is costly in foreign. Another essential point is, some
students
 experience cultural shock. Some customs are totally different as compared to their home country. They do not understand
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 people are polite or rude;
therefore
, unknowingly they may offend people.
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, touching the elder's feet for their blessing is normal in India, but
this
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 in foreign. On the flip side, studying
in
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abroad has numerous benefits.
Firstly
, schooling from foreign gives you
better
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 job
opportunity
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.
Large
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 number of
company
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companies
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 preferred workers who have a foreign degree. To illustrate with an example,
masters
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 from Canada or USA gives an extra edge and weightage to the applicant's CV as compared to others.
Finally
,
students
 have access to better
education
. When studying in
prestige
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university
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universities
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,
student
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students
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 have a chance to learn from teachers who are
expert
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experts
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 in their field. To conclude, schooling in foreign has advantages
such
 as good work
opportunity
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opportunities
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 and better study as compared to its disadvantages like cost and cultural shock. In my opinion, better schooling and good job
opportunity
 are essential so the benefits of foreign
education
 outweigh the drawbacks.
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