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the use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the advance of social
media
,
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 creasing number of
people
 all over the world rely on social networking sites to keep in touch with others that they know. While there are some positive aspects of
this
 trend, I believe that the disadvantages derived from it outweigh the benefits which it entails. On the one hand, two clear advantages of using social
media
 rather than meeting up face-to-face can be seen.
Firstly
, in the modern world, families and friends may work or study far from home.
Thus
, they use social networks to contact each other. To cite an example, a family gathering could be established via group calls by social
media
 like Zoom.
Furthermore
, on account of sites like Facebook or Instagram, it is now possible to keep in touch with a large number of
people
.
People
 are able to share photos, make small talk, exchange news via social networks. Many
people
,
for instance
, have a lot of followers on their Facebook page.
On the other hand
, I would argue that there is no replacement for face-to-face
interaction
. One reason is that social
media
 discourage real
interaction
 and block us from the development of social skills. Humans use all their senses in other to communicate fully
such
 as touch and gestures.
In addition
, despite advances in technology, face-to-face
interaction
 avoids some of the dangers of online. These include computer hackers and online scams, stealing personal information on networking sites.
For example
, if I announce on Facebook that I will be going abroad on holiday, I may return to find my house has been burgled. In conclusion, albeit the majority of
people
 can now access the internet and social
media
 are widely used, I consider that the drawbacks of lack of personal contact compared with face-to-face
interaction
 and issues of privacy outweigh the advantages.
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