Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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way to consume for individuals.others argued that it is not possible I firmly believe that there are several benefits in
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can get much profit.
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and how do use, discount, guaranty, price.
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very useful for me until now.so that I accept
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way to peoples consumes
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lost their money as well as they ignored
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some companies produce protein
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for bodybuilders and they
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many famous bodybuilders photos in their
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but it is not true and many sighteffct may come from these.
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use natural protein foods rather than these supplements .goverment should stop like these fake
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believe that the benefits outweigh drawbacks in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertising
  • positive effects
  • negative effects
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • awareness
  • information
  • entertainment
  • discounts
  • promotions
  • job opportunities
  • increased sales
  • profits
  • brand visibility
  • recognition
  • competitive advantage
  • product diversification
  • service diversification
  • influence
  • consumer behavior
  • unrealistic standards
  • beauty
  • invasion of privacy
  • financial pressure
  • high costs
  • misleading practices
  • deceptive practices
  • negative publicity
  • reputation damage
  • increased competition
  • balancing
  • ethical advertising
  • responsible advertising
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