You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Sir, I am writing to seek information about the upcoming
seminar
on
audit
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audits

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in your organization. I am a Chartered Certified Accountant since 2017 and working as an
Audit
Officer in a firm. To enhance my exposure in
audit
I was looking for a
seminar
or work-related workshop. While searching for that It
is
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came
in
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to

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my knowledge that you are organizing a
seminar
on
audit
. I am a national of
US
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the US

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,
thats
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why I needed a visa for that
seminar
. Will you please provide me with the details of that event? When will
this
event happen? What will be the timings of the
seminar
? Is it
one-day
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seminar
or more than one day? Will you manage the accommodation for the participants or do we have to arrange it ourselves? How much will it cost to each participant? Is there any special discount
to
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on

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overseas ones? Please provide me
this
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information at your earliest. I shall be very thankful to you. Regards Rehan
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