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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in some countries, there are more and more
parents
 who prefer to teach their offspring by themselves at
home
, but from my point of view, I think the disadvantages are more than the benefits of
this
 issue. Even though
children
 have
education
 at
home
 may be safer than at school, it
also
 may cause students to be lack chances to learn how to build friendships with other same age. It is not hard to imagine those
children
 can only get companionships from their
parents
 if they just have
education
 at
home
, but the environment of school can encourage them to know what others' characteristics and hobbies are, so they can make friends with their schoolmates and have various activities with them, it will make their
study
 careers more substantial and fun. From another point of view, only having an
education
 at
home
 from
parents
 may cause
children
 couldn't have balanced development of all kinds of courses, considering that
children
's
parents
 may have good achievement in math while inabilities in language. If they insist on teaching their
children
 by themselves, it will definitely to be a negative effect on the
children
's language
study
.
Besides
,
children
 who have
education
 at
home
 cannot be guaranteed to have a regular learning duration. In modern society, people will spend most of their day time for their jobs, and it is unreliable to ask those low self-control teenagers to
study
 without supervisors every day. In conclusion, I think those disadvantages of having an
education
 at
home
 are obviously, and it definitely will have more positive effects on
children
's
study
 than those advantages.
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