Youth crime is increasing rapidly in many countries. Why it is increasing? and what solution can be taken to resolve the problem.
Young
culprits Correct article usage
The young
number has
been rapidly Wrong verb form
have
raised
in a lot of nations. Verb problem
rising
This
led government
to find out the reasons Add an article
the government
to solve
Change preposition
for solving
such
as friendships, leisure activities and financial problems, which could be solved by proper education and have
over Wrong verb form
having
the
responsibilities.
There are reasons for Correct article usage
apply
this
increasing rate, including lack
of job opportunities among young adults, especially fresh Correct article usage
a lack
graduations
. Replace the word
graduates
For example
, if a newly graduated person does not find a vocation, he would do thievery to overcome some financial issues. Moreover
, playing violent video games such
as Pubg, Fortnight and Call of Duties in their leisure time, would affect their unconscious,
Correct word choice
and, therefore
therefore
on
their behaviour. Change preposition
apply
Lastly
, the circle of friendship plays a key role in youngsters' character. Some youth, for instance
, would do delinquency just to remain as a group member which could be triggered by excitement.
However
, some solutions could be considered as a remedy for these states. First of all, education has a major impact on teenagers' future and young adults. For example
, teaching practical skills such
as painting or construction in schools and universities simultaneous with meetings with like
ex-prisoners as a live show of criminal consequences could lead them to a proper future far away from crimes. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, authorities should improve job opportunities by supporting entrepreneurs, local businesses and so on which engaged
new employees. Wrong verb form
engages
At
Change preposition
Last
last
but not least, reinforcing family relationships through free workshops, TV shows and so on would lead young people toward better decisions.
To conclude
, the important issue such
as increasing
youth crime rate would be controlled, if governments and society Correct article usage
the increasing
itself
cooperate to enhance economic and social situations.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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